Friday, April 6, 2012

NaPoWriMo 2012 - Day # 6 - starship




too much sci-fi, perhaps?



starship


light
   years
   away

      from a past
      that was a murky
      distant memory was
      the dust of stars and
      generations have lived
      propagated warred killed
      loved and died on this ship
      carrying rain forests and
      oceans and an armour of
      air and treasures and
      myths and species
      hurtling through
      its destiny
      this ship

   we
   called
Terra




06/04/2012
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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2012

8 comments:

ashok said...

interestingly written!

dsnake1 said...

thanks, Ashok!

this is a stab at "shape poetry". i imagined our earth as a giant spacecraft, so we must really take care of it. :)

Lynn Fisher said...

shape or (are they also called concrete poems?) are some of my favorites. You did this very well.

kamana said...

i liked this. shape too.

Ravenblack said...

That could be a sail or a space ship. :)

dsnake1 said...

Lynn,

yes, they are also called concrete poems. an interesting form, but quite difficult to write at times. :)

thank you for your comments.


kamana,

thanks for visiting and leaving your comments. :)


Raven,

is it? yes, it does look like a sail from another angle. :D

Mary Bauer said...

This is an excellent example of concrete poetry. I want to share it with my students.
http://poemsofsilliness.blogspot.com/

dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Mary!

i would be honoured. :)