Sunday, April 14, 2013

NaPoWriMo 2013, Day #14 - jam

Urg! It's getting tougher...


As I hummed a tune about the great steppes, my bus arrives, jam-packed as usual.

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ), 2013


Lynn Fisher said...

Isn't it though! I'm actually surprised at how I am just feeling a flattened by the thought...we have another half if a month to get through!!!!!!!
Actually, I love your short, to the point, visual poem. It has a traditional haiku-like element, without the hard and fast rules. A great poem!
Take heart!

dsnake1 said...

it's like running a long distance race. :)

Thanks for the support, Lynn! It's almost the halfway mark!

i like my haiku to be unfettered by the 5-7-5 rule. :)
for this piece, i wanted to do an American Sentences, but couldn't get to the 17 syllable rule.

Lynn Fisher said...

Half way there! Half way there!

dsnake1 said...

Right! glad we made it this far. :)

Ravenblack said...

Yeah I know this. Nice turn there. Keep it up, dsnake, enjoy it! :)

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